外编点评：这篇文章漏用了一些关键的连词和冠词，例如“has only half a year left”，丢掉了动词has 和冠词a ；“to be an elegant, beautiful, and confident girl”丢掉了冠词an。英语中“大学生活”一般不用college life来形容，所以文中的句子最好改成“I only have half a year left at college”和“my hairstyle has stayed the same throughout college”。另外一些词没有使用复数形式，例如“times past”和“too many wonderful memories” ......